<p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">主講:陌上花開(kāi)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">主任:梅花,歡聲笑語(yǔ)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">輔導(dǎo):鴨梨閑人,青山綠水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)閱:鴨梨閑人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">制作:歡聲笑語(yǔ)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(237, 35, 8);">圖片:作者自拍</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1);">1.</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:做事何妨造化輕(希熱)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:最苦/何妨 陰陽(yáng)/造化 詞性不對(duì)品</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1);">2.</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:處世實(shí)甘朋友多(楊柳依依)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:實(shí)甘,自造詞,不通。陰陽(yáng)/朋友詞性不妥。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(1, 1, 1);">3.</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:舉步維艱荊棘多(楊柳依依)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:不可成語(yǔ)直接入聯(lián)對(duì)句,除非出句也用成語(yǔ)了。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">4.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:處世何堪母子分(歡聲笑語(yǔ))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:挑個(gè)刺噢,為人最苦(的是)陰陽(yáng)隔,處世何堪(的是)母子分?大節(jié)奏的劃分就不對(duì)了。對(duì)你,我的要求就高一點(diǎn)噢。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">5.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:使我何堪母女分(梅花)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:對(duì)你,我的要求高一點(diǎn)了噢,前四字,感覺(jué)不通。后三字顛倒到前面試試?父女分(這個(gè)事)使我何堪?怪怪的。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">6.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:聞道方知福禍依(小安)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。但是上下關(guān)聯(lián)很弱。上聯(lián)是比較“悲,苦”的感情色彩,對(duì)句比較平淡。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">7.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:為人最苦陰陽(yáng)隔(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:終老馀哀天地空(京如鏡)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">8.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:年豐碩果綴枝頭(歡聲笑語(yǔ))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">9.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:春深紅雨落花枝(希熱)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">10.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:秋深黃葉落軒窗(安享時(shí)光)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">評(píng)閱:可以。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">11.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:平安康樂(lè)吉祥庭(楚秀清)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:節(jié)奏劃分不對(duì),另,歲久/平安 ,綠苔/康樂(lè) , 詞性不對(duì)品。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">12.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:日斜紅藥掩庭階(小安)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以是可以,日斜/紅藥最好有個(gè)因果關(guān)系。出句是因?yàn)椤皻q久”才會(huì)“生綠苔”</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:庭院疏雨落池塘(小安)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:也是前四句的因果關(guān)系</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:更深明月照闌干(小安)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:如果出句的物象有顏色,對(duì)句最好不要有月。月光下,看東西顏色是看不清的,不像大白天。所以邏輯上有點(diǎn)不妥。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">13.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:春來(lái)喜氣罩門庭(梅花)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。只是院宇/門庭 略感合掌之嫌噢。出句有房子了,對(duì)句就盡量不要再說(shuō)房子了。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">14.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:年豐金谷壓田園(楊柳依依)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以。壓字可酌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:深秋紅柿掛疏枝(楊柳依依)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:院宇/疏枝,詞性不對(duì)品。其他可以。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">15.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:冬寒白雪亂山風(fēng)(岑淵)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱;出句說(shuō)明了不是冬天,春夏秋都有可能。你們你對(duì)冬天,就隔景了。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">16.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:秋深黃葉落村林(森林)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:可以</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block">17.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:春來(lái)芳草滿山林(柴軍)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:綠苔/芳草,院宇/山林,詞性不對(duì)品。句意略顯平淡。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">18.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:年修心態(tài)易平和(月棠)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:歲久(了,才生)綠苔,有因果關(guān)系。年修/心態(tài)?</span></p> <p class="ql-block">19.</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(255, 138, 0);">出句:歲久綠苔生院宇(陌上花開(kāi))</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(57, 181, 74);">對(duì)句:年終春到故思親(月棠)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color: rgb(22, 126, 251);">評(píng)閱:綠苔/春到,生/故, 院宇/思親,詞性不對(duì)品。</span></p>