刊首語 <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">欣勻翠色描春景 試引清音和雅鐘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">???“深圳市長(zhǎng)青詩社詩鐘分社（簡(jiǎn)稱長(zhǎng)青詩鐘社）”在廣大詩詞楹聯(lián)愛好者的期待中，承中國楹聯(lián)學(xué)會(huì)詩鐘分會(huì)專業(yè)指導(dǎo)，蒙深圳市長(zhǎng)青詩社及長(zhǎng)青詩學(xué)院鼎力支持，于乙巳新春沐雨新生。傳統(tǒng)文化傳承又添新枝，嶺南詩壇幸得清響。諸聯(lián)友聞之欣然，賡續(xù)前賢遺韻，切磋于斯；擷取時(shí)代新聲，耕耘于圳。同好相攜，愿以筆墨記錄點(diǎn)滴，借網(wǎng)絡(luò)聯(lián)通四方，謹(jǐn)守初心，徐徐前行。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:right;"><span style="font-size:20px;">長(zhǎng)青詩鐘社 張能敏</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:right;"><span style="font-size:20px;">2025年2月25日</span></p> 點(diǎn)評(píng)老師簡(jiǎn)介 <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;"> 周冰：</b><span style="font-size:20px;">網(wǎng)名冰洲企鵝，廣東茂名人。中國楹聯(lián)學(xué)會(huì)詩鐘分會(huì)評(píng)委、廣東楹聯(lián)學(xué)會(huì)會(huì)員、廣東嶺南詩社茂名分社副社長(zhǎng)兼秘書長(zhǎng)。從事楹聯(lián)研究與創(chuàng)作30余年，原創(chuàng)楹聯(lián)作品3000余副，多次獲得全國、省、市級(jí)的楹聯(lián)競(jìng)賽獎(jiǎng)項(xiàng)。在廣東省《楹聯(lián)》會(huì)刊等報(bào)刊雜志發(fā)表楹聯(lián)學(xué)術(shù)論文5篇。2020年擔(dān)任“崇文杯”全國楹聯(lián)有獎(jiǎng)大賽總評(píng)委。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">長(zhǎng)青詩鐘社每周楹聯(lián)對(duì)句練筆第22期</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">二題出題老師：周冰</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">一、橫云堪斷岳</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">二、落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1. 董奕炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">閃電敢撕天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工穩(wěn)，氣度雄壯。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛花逐水錦鱗游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻形象，錦鱗稍寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2. 熊劍文 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">駕霧可遮天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">?評(píng)：對(duì)仗尚工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">疏枝漏雨鷓鴣啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻關(guān)聯(lián)不夠明顯。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">3. 蔡啟新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">縱浪可滔天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮花逐水鳳凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">注：李白《登金陵鳳凰臺(tái)》；也可理解為雙關(guān)：鳳凰花評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻形象。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">4. 劉美艷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">逝水不流年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：語句不通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流霞染嶺鳳凰吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：葉/霞稍寬，對(duì)仗較工，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">5. 賴志雄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日自垂山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：岳/山詞義相近。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:20px;">寒花映日鷓鴣吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">6. 毛榮 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落雨欲平湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛舟逐浪海鷗歡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：葉/舟略寬，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">7. 張玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">漫雪欲彌天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛鴻列陣字符橫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗欠工，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">8. 吳本科</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛雁可書天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：云/雁稍寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美人逐浪錦鱗游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：美人對(duì)仗寬，比喻尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">9. 劉建利</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">長(zhǎng)浪欲吞洲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流螢掠水玉鱗飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：流螢、玉鱗對(duì)仗寬，比喻尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">10. 韓樹國 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">立壁可穿天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">佳人照水牡丹開</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：佳人、牡丹對(duì)仗寬。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">11. 張發(fā)展 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">掣電欲燃峰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮蓮出水彩云漂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：比喻形象，彩云對(duì)仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">12. 方祥炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">曲水獨(dú)長(zhǎng)流</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：長(zhǎng)流對(duì)仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">愁心伴雨鳳凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：愁心不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">13. 文勵(lì)洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">惡浪欲吞舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：舟字對(duì)仗略寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋花帶露織娘鳴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)，蝴蝶以連綿詞對(duì)仗為上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">14. 老蜜蜂 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流水可浮舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：舟字略寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮云映日雪山堆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗不工，關(guān)聯(lián)不及。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">15. 魏海 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">入海不停濤</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">彈琴入耳鳳凰鳴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：彈琴入耳對(duì)仗寬。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">16. 皮柏仁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫雲(yún)堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白雨欲摧城</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：城字略寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛花伴日鷓鴣鳴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">17. 姚小平</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">厚雪欲遮城</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：城字略寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">殘花墜露杜鵑啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">18. 劉樣明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日獨(dú)浮江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有意境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">斜陽映水鯉魚翔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：斜陽略寬，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">19. 王鳳華</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">皚雪壓瓊芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：壓瓊芳，對(duì)仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">20. 葉水招</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">垂瀑欲吞天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">行舟逐浪劍魚飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：舟字對(duì)仗略寬。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">21. 秦禾 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">激浪可驚天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">禽鴨入水燕鷹翔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">22. 鄒勝階</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">甘雨恰興農(nóng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗稍寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">繁花映水錦鱗描</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗尚可，描字欠斟酌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">23. 吳友元</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日看流霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗欠工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛花逐水鳳凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻形象。佳句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">24. 王慶春 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">卷浪欲銜崖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">蘆花照水鷺鷥棲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：蘆花稍寬，其他對(duì)仗工，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">25. 鄭妙鑾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">縱浪可吞川</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流泉漱石杜鵑啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗尚可，比喻形象。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">26. 張能敏 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鳴瀑欲翻潭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有氣勢(shì)。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">荒苔背日牡丹開</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：牡丹對(duì)仗寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">27. 紫夢(mèng) </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛瀑欲摩天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">輕舟逐水燕鶯啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：輕舟、燕鶯對(duì)仗寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">28. 呂伯平 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">斜雨欲吞川</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，有意境。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛花逐浪鷺鷥鳴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗工，比喻關(guān)聯(lián)不緊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">29. 王 暉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛鳥欲銜花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗過寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">凋花逐月夜螢飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：夜螢欠工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">30. 鄧未玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">亂草欲遮天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：草字稍寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮花映月玉蛾飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：玉蛾對(duì)仗寬。<span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">31. 劉鳳麟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?絕頂欲攀天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)仗尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">孤帆逐水鷓鴣飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：帆字對(duì)仗稍寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">32. 吳建安 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">活水可推舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：舟字略寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">綿羊結(jié)隊(duì)白云飄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：比喻形象，對(duì)仗過寬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">33. 李希海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">積霧欲長(zhǎng)空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：長(zhǎng)字對(duì)仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">荻花照月鷺鷥棲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：荻花稍寬，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">34. 方后勝 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">橫云堪斷岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">出句好描天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">評(píng)：對(duì)句不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落葉隨風(fēng)蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮云撥霧的盧騰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">注：的盧劉備坐騎。評(píng)：對(duì)仗欠工，比喻未關(guān)聯(lián)。</span></p> 長(zhǎng)青詩鐘社簡(jiǎn)介 <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">總顧問：孫 英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顧 問：陳麗榮 楊玲玲 劉萬專 蘭 葆 史桂娟 扈秀英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">客座教授：魯曉川 于東光</span></p><p class="ql-block">指導(dǎo)教師：王善全 王安石 林奇敏 王純富</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">評(píng)聯(lián)教師：許明 周 冰 盛躍章 熊劍文 李 楚 魏艷霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">名譽(yù)社長(zhǎng)：劉新穎 劉紅艷 許 明 盛月富 黃桂珍 文勵(lì)洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">社 長(zhǎng)：張能敏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副社長(zhǎng)：王 暉 劉美艷 張玉忠 鄧未玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秘書長(zhǎng)：王 暉（兼）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副秘書長(zhǎng)：董奕炎 劉樣明 李希海 毛榮 齊春紅 劉建利</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">長(zhǎng)青詩社美篇編輯部主編：盧敬兵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">詩鐘分社美篇編輯部主編：文勵(lì)洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">詩鐘分社美篇編輯部副主編：鄧未玲 張玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">詩鐘分社美篇編輯部編委：王暉 劉美艷 董奕炎 劉樣明 李希海 毛榮 齊春紅 劉建利</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美篇模版</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">圖片摘自網(wǎng)絡(luò) 感謝原作者</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期編輯：張玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期審核：張能敏</span></p> 敬請(qǐng)期待下期精彩 <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">上期：</b><a href="http://www.jiudian163.cn/5hp3mgmh?first_share_to=timeline&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=50589725" target="_blank" style="font-size:18px; 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